Allright, I'm not trying to seem professional, okay? This is just what I would've done different if I came up with a video like that
First of all, you could've filmed yourself in more angles, like from the side or like right under your chin (so that your head looks huge lol), it would've made the video funnier. Also, while telling your story, you could've filmed yourself in different areas of the house/outside the house walking through an alley or something (just representing what your story was about, if you get what I mean), so that you could watch something else in the video rather than your creepy halloween face
. (Actually, I would'nt have done this because I'm simply too lazy to go outside lol). For the rest your video was just fine, as I said, I did enjoy it sirrr.